balthazar: I liked the richness of the description, and the hints of the larger world that were revealed through the snippet we saw. It was a little exposition heavy, and there was some tense switching towards the end. A vivid submission!
kitoba: Oh, man, this idea is so intriguing! It definitely captured my attention. My one hesitation is that it's not clear who the narrator is (whether a person who experienced Heat, a disembodied "history book" voice, etc.) I'd love to read a longer story based around this idea.
AlternateTorg: Ha, I liked this! It had a nice arc with a satisfying ending. I would maybe have liked the reveal of the gun's name to be a little more happenstance instead of the preacher deliberately showing it; that felt a little "cutesy."
drachefly: Extremely intriguing, but I feel like I didn't quite get what it was hinting at. That could be me being dense as a reader, of course. I liked what I understood of it.
Edguy: Thanks for the musical interlude!
chaosman: A fun idea for a Tomato Surprise; you could have made it a little longer and put more description into the battlefield descriptions if you really wanted to draw us in.
And the winner is ... AlternateTorg!